Beautiful and stirring, and although it borders a little on the squicky side to me (I'm reeeeally not into the idea of pedophilia, usually), you made it seem believable. That's definitely a plus. I've been writing for this fandom since around September-October of last year and you're definitely much better at it than I was. I'd encourage you to take your prose to the FanFiction.net Gunslinger Girl section, but there's so much drama going on there since ninetailed and I arrived that I...wouldn't want to drag anybody near it. You still can if you want to, though! You're an excellent writer.
Just one thing — the girls do age. It's proven in the manga that ADV hasn't translated. XD Henrietta still looks pretty juvenile in the sixth volume, though (she only got taller; up to Giuseppe's shoulders now, but the other girls definitely look different from their 1-3 selves).
Re: Aforementioned FFN section. They're in the midst of a scanlation process for volumes 4-7. A link to the progress. (http://www.fanfiction.net/fr/930385/4167/1465831/1/)
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Date: 2007-01-20 07:41 pm (UTC)You still can if you want to, though! You're an excellent writer.Just one thing — the girls do age. It's proven in the manga that ADV hasn't translated. XD Henrietta still looks pretty juvenile in the sixth volume, though (she only got taller; up to Giuseppe's shoulders now, but the other girls definitely look different from their 1-3 selves).
Re: Aforementioned FFN section. They're in the midst of a scanlation process for volumes 4-7. A link to the progress. (http://www.fanfiction.net/fr/930385/4167/1465831/1/)